I’d really appreciate your help with this scene.
My scenario. Hero and heroine’s first meeting. Remote location, time is early 2003. Heroine is driving a horse and cart and finds hero unconscious in a ditch. Hero has catapulted off a moving truck and is suffering a broken leg, shoulder separation, multiple cuts and contusions. (He is not quite human so the injuries aren’t going to kill him.) Heroine must stabilize and transport him in the bed of the cart by herself with what supplies she has at hand. She has experience with farm animals and she washed out of EMT training years ago so she does have some knowledge. For the heroine to physically get the man into the cart the hero must be somewhat conscious.
Which scenario would be more likely:
A)Heroine decides to set the broken leg and the pain awakens the hero, or B) hero regains consciousness and convinces the heroine to set the leg, thereby being awake enough to aid his move?
In this day and age (including in 2003), no one would try to set the leg without X-rays. She could try to stabilize it with a splint—a board on either side of the leg banded together with cloth (ripped clothes/blanket/rags).
The hero is likely to wake up if she moves his leg—fractures are very painful. It won’t make it easier to move if his leg is splinted. He won’t be able to stand on it.
He can wake spontaneously—doesn’t have to be from pain.
And how much detail should I put in the scene? Would a reader be interested in how she checks for lung puncture or why she makes a cervical collar out of the SAM split she has in the cart’s first aid kit?
Consider putting in whatever detail anchors the reader in the scene. What is she going to do to check for a punctured lung? I’d suggest he could cough up pink foam (blood mixed with air) as an indication of that.
Come to think of it, would she bother with a cervical collar when she can’t immobilize him in a back board anyway? What do you think?
IMHO, it’s better to focus on a couple of big medical details. I’d skip the collar—if she’s going to move him anyway, it becomes a moot point.
Good luck with your scene, DM!
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